Happy outside

give it up
the gift is lost within
the dreams
hidden outside your door

hold me down
it`s all in my head
they lift me up
i hit the ground

strong desire
weak and lost
courage forbidden
but happy outside



Poetry by Cr4Ky
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Written on 2005-09-12 at 22:52

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happyhappyjoyjoy
happyhappyjoyjoy

makes me think of rin (ren/rhen?) and stimpy. i always liked stimpy better.

happy on the outside, is half the battle.
2005-09-14


F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
like a self-portrait, is it... this one reached me deep as i can identify very well... the lines that struck me "they lift me up
i hit the ground" and the conclusion... difficult to explain but they shook me in my inner core, you know... this is a sad poem but your delivery certainly leaves an impact... nicely expressed... thanks for sharing :f

later... xx
2005-09-14


epohonci
i'm not sure know anyone who's truly happy on the inside, i think we've mostly all got blackholes right in the center. happy on the outside sometimes isn't even doable.
2005-09-13


chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
arr we can all be happy on the outside, it's within that really matters.
2005-09-12