I've heard so many times that this is my best poem ever. It's my favorite by far, and the last stanza is my favorite out of anything I've ever written.


Abyss

Sometimes I just want to let go,
And fall into that sweet abyss.
Forget about my troubles,
And feel that utter bliss.

Oh how good it must surely feel,
To be free from worry or care.
To revel in that freedom,
With a lesser pain to bear.

It almost hurts to have to live
With this constant strain.
I'm just looking for a release,
To somehow stop the pain.

Everything I end up trying
Always seems to fail.
For once I want to find a way
To leave without a trail.

I'm looking for a chasm
Though I always need it deeper.
None are ever deep enough
To be my tension's reaper.



Poetry by Surreal
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Written on 2007-02-04 at 03:19

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A good poem for sure surreal, the abyss is a tempting leap sometimes, but you are young and it's a little early for such thoughts imo. You should be making the most of your youth, you certainly are in poetic terms. A very thought provoking poem. Just remember, it is never as bad as it seems.

Smiling at you,

Tai
2007-02-04