entangled


My last steps
bubbles to breathe
in empty waters
of ocean blue

where the tracks end
a few footsteps of sand
a shell of black
is abandoned
forever

how could I sink
so fast
my hair
entangled in my mouth
with my final words


Nordsaga 2008



Poetry by Nordsaga
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Written on 2008-12-26 at 23:41

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Eli The PoetBay support member heart!
The imagery of the last few lines was so vivid. Thank You
2009-01-31


Rob Graber
"how could I sink / so fast":
a haunting write.
2009-01-30



I like the thoughts entangled here, I like the structure and how it can depict our circumstances, thank goodness our circumstanes are temporal. I read it with another perspective as the year coming to an end, time can entangle us in various things, we are the results of yesterdays decisions. This poem has many facets to it and I like the variety it gives the reader.
2008-12-27