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2005-10-30
An excellent piece!
I agree with chasingtheday about the suggested changes.
Otherwise a fantastic stillness - and the simile of white faces falling was really original, I think!
This poem also gives me a pang of recollection, since I lived in Norway for many years (in Kongsberg).
Fazza.
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| JOURNEY
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2005-06-11
A fantastic text! Just how it is, isn't it?
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| Utopia
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2005-05-31
This is a very skilled wrought poem, I think, with the rhythm so well expressing an almost zen-like feeling of how everything is of the same nature - the mountains, the sky, your mind.
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| when the dust no longer was made of silver
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2005-05-29
In the words you have chosen, there is a fantastic mirroring of a desolate soul's wandering!
Yes!
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| the titular
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2005-05-29
A powerful poem! A strong poem!
And, in a way, a so very sad poem.
Beautifully written!!
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| a new shade of blue
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2005-05-28
Hi, nice to read you in English, as well!
The raven, again: I LOVE it!
But I still think it reads better with "dimming my sight" instead of "and dim my sight"...
My, my! You are blood red here, are you not?
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