D'Antay Web
there is a poignant stillness of a moment captured... pictures of fallen snowflakes on the moon lit darkness;a feeling that pervaded my very own (personal) way of seeing - thus, the flittering love-like prose (epoch) of reminiscence... a cold night that warms the sensual heart. Good work.
2006-08-21

Christoffer Waye
I like this peom it is almost as you feel the coldness of the snow, wonderfull :D
2006-06-02

fazza
An excellent piece!
I agree with chasingtheday about the suggested changes.
Otherwise a fantastic stillness - and the simile of white faces falling was really original, I think!
This poem also gives me a pang of recollection, since I lived in Norway for many years (in Kongsberg).
Fazza.
2005-10-30

Nenne
I have no idea what a basic A-C rhyme is.
However, I feel like a poem is like your hearts voice. Not something who need rules of how it should be written...
2005-09-28

John Ashleigh
The first and third like need working on, but I have to give this a 4. The reason being because this is a very original peice and you haven't used the basic A-C rhyme like I see al l the time.

Great xx
2005-09-28

F.i.in.e Moods
i get a feeling of departure (death or breakup) with the choice of words... the atmosphere of the situation definitely chilling... thanks for sharing :f

later... xx
2005-09-28

chasingtheday
i would change touched to touch.
was falling to were falling.

other than those two points, it is a good piece, though that third line looks a little long compared to the others, perhaps breaking it in half?

snow - it's not all snowballs and fun i suppose, it can be deadly too.

please take the time to vist others who post in the site?
2005-09-27