kayce
This is a wonderful poem, can't believe am just going through this lovely poem. You really expressed the beauty of nature, is touchy too.
2008-12-11

Colin Skilton
as the sands unwind so the picture becomes clearer.
Aaron a beautiful next chapter to this work full of sadness yet beauty and joy and
love.
Such deep feelings and well spent and written
Bless you for sharing with us.
Colin
2007-10-09

Lea Foverskov
my first comment was written as an ignoramus. a second comment is called for, for this text is beautiful, perhaps the best one of your series. because you are not quite so explicit about the life of Patricia, but rather focus on what you want to say with the poem, what is central to patricia's life. you take this poem to another level.
2007-09-23

Poetry-poofter
oh, this was such a great poem!
It's written with such a great flow.
I like how you describe nature, because
I think USA is a beautiful country
(where do you live?)
and the message and the story
in this poem is amazing
you shall be satisfied
2007-07-22

Lea Foverskov
Hi Aaron - of course I'd read your text! I read it earlier on, actually, but clearly I had to return to it because I think I understand better now.

It is a poem that needs several readings because (sorry!) it's a little bit jumbled up and confusing. But on the other hand, it wins on a closer acquaintance. It has many layers and many aspects to it - man's creations, God's (?) creation, the stars and what they represent to each individual, and lost ones that we love.

But what I like most about this poem is not it's many facets but that I think it means something to you personally. I know the feeling of writing a poem and feeling tht this really is a part of you and expresses you - but they are not always the most "readable" poems, not always the ones most appreciated by others. But I love that I can read that in the text, it is a forceful expression of that.

So thank you!
2007-07-14