Appraisal


i wonder what you'd say
if you got a letter from
a nobody
clothed modestly with
humble truth

could you see past your wall
or would all words fail
to find purchase?

i wonder what you'd say
if a somebody
wrote you a letter
dressed to kill with
fetching lies

would you kill the fattest calf
split your kingdom, give them half?
i think you might



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Written on 2018-11-21 at 04:23

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Economical, shapely language that exerts a certain magnetism over the reader ... I am glad to have read this poem!
2018-11-24


Bibek The PoetBay support member heart!
I love the use of rhetoric questions throughout the poem. I think the last line, however, dilutes the effect. How about ending the poem with a strong effect of a series of rhetoric questions? Just my thought.

Bibek
2018-11-22


one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
sometimes things are appraised for their value. sometimes for their lack of value. i think we see a clear erosion of value here.

i like your spare formatting, and clear wording.
2018-11-21