hold tight (continually revised)

 

i am imagining my reality is an ocean

the year is 1821

 

i write a letter to a friend, more than a friend

across the ocean

 

a year passes without word

then another 

 

i write again, with hope

another year passes, i hold tight to my hope 

 

five years go by, it's 1826

a letter arrives

 

it is a lovely letter, all i could hope for

yet, one line gives me pause

 

i write

i wait, i hope

 

 

 

 

 





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Written on 2021-06-02 at 02:34

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F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
I felt drawn in by the words, found myself invested in the story, making me want to know what would be its dénouement. It's really nicely done. And now I leave wondering what that line might have been... I like that it's left to the reader. The time period being specified was a nice touch too, 'cause in the context of those times, it always makes my imagination visualize the dress, the etiquettes, the morays, and on and on. I found it added to the whole of your words. Alors voilà, j'ai beaucoup aimé en d'autres mots :)
2021-06-03



Very good, Lynn. We like the sparse style yet rich content. The final two lines are particularly effective. It is pleasant to imagine different realities when writing creatively.
2021-06-02