beyond here you can not enter _ but you do even so



The story is as long as the city graveyard

You are at the beginning

With open arms

And the red nose around your neck


Was that the sound of your heart?

or is it me standing there

aging towards the end
of the stairs

shaped around our lives

behind the red ribbon

cut by a King

__

1 : love someone

2 : die

__


you smile

with the inside of your knee

talking about castles

as the day evaporates

into our breathes

and we pretend
to be something
but electrons

__

I am here

__


can you see me?




Poetry by Lourdes
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Written on 2006-07-01 at 12:52

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Julie Zerbe
yes I like this. The question "can you see me" does go through certain minds at certain times. "red nose around your neck" threw me a bit, but when I see you have written with other unexpected words together, I must assume it was on purpose. An interesting read.
2006-07-12


English War Veteran aged 98
I am caught up in the whirlwind of your objective abundance and your poetic fundamentalism that reaches out and touches the fabric of my being and rattles my wheelchair frame. Keep it up!
Great work. "You smile with the inside of your knee" - lucky you that you have a knee!!
2006-07-01


Kathy Lockhart
Oh I am truly in this poem's ever gazing trance. We are electrons, I can feel you. kathy
2006-07-01


Zoya Zaidi
*Bookmarked*
2006-07-01


Zoya Zaidi
This is beautiful Laurdes!
Breathtakingly so!
You are in the begining,
and your the end here,
it is you, through and through!
**Big fond hugs**
Love, xxx, Zoya
2006-07-01


lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
Oh i bet he can se you with the lovelight in his eyes following this text a clever use of words and line structure rgds mike
2006-07-01