tony
surely, one must read what you have written, one or twice through, to completely fathom what it is you were trying to convey...though, i do think this could have been made with a bit more detail, the simplicity of it, seems to work...

you know, it seems as if everyone comments without specific points, on people's poetry...im really wishing to react to your piece, to truly respond, in such a manner that you would take to heart, but, there is hardly enough to begin identifying relatable qualities...the ill-specific sense of poetry, in general, and taken to many different aspects, by us, here, especially, removes the ability to really reply, in a poetic sense.

hmm...dont know if all that made sense to you or not. but, ive just found, in my few writings ive posted, there have been a mere few, who have really made a point to specifically respond, and have a point to actually make. i have to fall into the opposite category, in my own comments, so, i guess thats why im trying to go into a bit more detail.

your piece, seemed to come off far too simply, in my mind. though, still, the potential seems to make quite a stand, in your favor...
2006-07-07

Thomas Selnes
A fresh piece this. Liked it, might be the demons with their orgasmic delight, the message, or the way you hurl out imperatives, anyway; nice write!
2006-07-07