Left in a stairway at 2:00pm

It's broke
Like a
Cried out loser
In a stairway
Left behind
Because of
A few words
It's kind of
Tragic but
In somehow
You can see
The light
And the
Warm in it.



Poetry by Tobias Bauer
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Written on 2006-07-07 at 16:10

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tony
"but in somehow"?

you lost me there, guy, and it was working out so well for you, this randomly worded experiment of an experience...

i liked this, i did, but, somehow, some way, even in the midst of unrelatable context, you have to give your reader something with a bit more refined substance...

we, then, do the rest...
2006-07-07