Sigh


So
we were there
That night

i can still remember

how she

talked to my

she told me
that

i

i can still
remember??

That Night..

She had beautiful eyes

and

she
told me that
i

that we
should,
make love

all night
that night
was a
beautiful night...

it was.. right?

RIGHT!

but it is
no longer

but so
it was

untill Now

she is gone
i dry my tears

i can live
but
not
without her





Poetry by C
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Written on 2005-10-08 at 21:55

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Commentally Ill
a sigh, indeed

hard, the feeling that you can't go on without another. but time is the great healer of all.
2005-10-09



I really like the sighing rhythm of this text.
2005-10-08


Ray
Love can sometimes seem or feel cruel. But it is not true. Love is always beautiful. It's just the way we percieve love is what has us confused. I enjoyed your poem.
2005-10-08


chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
it is a good piece but perhaps taking out the elipses (...) plus using to instead of 2. taking out the extra question mark where you have two. not capitilising night. beutifull - beautiful. not having the word right in capitals. and now with a capital n and her with a capital h. those points aside lol the poem itself is nice.
2005-10-08

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