What I like to call concrete poetry. Something I wrote and formatted along time ago. Not as perfectly shaped as Nepenthes' "A Teardrop" but let's see who can figure out what picture I seek to paint. Comments please.


PHALLIC

stret
chingout
ofitsskin
becoming
aliveagain
hardening
againstthe
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Cleopatra



Poetry by Cleopatra
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Written on 2007-03-15 at 04:43

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night soul woman The PoetBay support member heart!
*lol*That's so clever girl!Wicked!*lol*Love it!*applause*and welcome to the bay :)
2007-03-19


Zoya Zaidi
Well,what an idea!
Love the word drawing!
((hugs))
Welcome again to the bay Cloa!
Love, Zoya

Language: 5
Format: 5
Mood: 5
Overall: 5
2007-03-18


Abstrakt
Very cleverly done....an excellent write.

Language: 5
Format: 5
Mood: 5
Overall: 5
2007-03-18


Mikael Lövkvist
Cool idea, Cleopatra! A very smooth poem. The shape? Must be a ... rocket ship ready to launch... a pyramid ready to be climbed ... a banana ready to be pealed ... :-)
2007-03-17


Karen Canning
this is very cleverly written to make it a picture poem too,one tiny thing should the first word be stretching? love it though, bravo

huggs
karenxx
2007-03-15



and now the real comment :D (i'm sorry for the other one:D)
this is very objective and subjective at the same time...and the shape goes very well with the main idea :D nicely done, Cleo!
Lilly xxx
2007-03-15



lolllll :D:D:D
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Lilly xxx
2007-03-15