http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yJWJ8FtxxU0


I never told you

the magic dance we danced
the magic moment we shared
I never told you so
I let it go
I have a memory safe in my dream
the moment we darent to share
its very much alive inside of me




Words by Radha
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Written on 2009-04-13 at 16:05

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Thoroughly enjoyed watching the video, took me back to when the song hit the charts in my early youth. I loved the first lines, because we can all relate to dancing the magic dance with someone we adore or adored, moments like those, are the treasures of our lives, imo.

The title is a little minimal, but now you have told whoever it was meant for. Not sure the message within the poem was that clear though, the 4th line kind of indicates loss of the memory somehow and I would suggest a bit more definition there. And should line 6 be, 'dare not to share'? or should it be 'dared to share'? whatever it is obvious you did.

Smiling at you

Tai
2009-04-13