I manage to fluke
a 10 syl per line lol

Not sure where it came from
I was listening to some music.

~L.~



Stumbling Feet Can Still Dance [Sonnet]





Emotional crime bandits needing help
innocence of self boxing with shadows
struggling now Life's a train wreak dealt
past memories out of sight now yellows
Time has been so frivolously wasted
pleasing others and hiding YOU away
there's so many joys you could have tasted
if only you relaxed more every day
Your dreams they stayed trapped inside your head
you've got only the mirror to show why
you didn't listen to any advice said
but it's not shameful to be wrong and cry
While dancing out of your own rhythms beat
stumbling you can still find your feet.

11/04/09




Sonnet by liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2009-04-16 at 07:59

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AH! i've never seen this pool business....agh...it's scaring me...ammm....great rhythm and flow and you successfully avoid being obvious...very nice. very original phrasing.

Language: 4
Format: 5
Mood: 5
Overall: 4
2009-05-19