I decided to emmulate someone else for today's oneword


Flight

I released the clutch as the car came to a halt and I let it slide out of gear

Sweat was trickling down my face and I just didn't know what to do

I breathed a deep breath and began to cry

It was too much... too soon... I couldn't take it...

Then suddenly, without even thinking, I started the car up again and just drove...

I got on the highway and drove and drove until I was fairly certain I was too far away for anyone to find me

Then I just broke down... I got out of my car... and ran... I just ran until I fell over

When I woke up, I calmly walked back to my car. I drove back into town, knowing nothing would ever be the same again.



Poetry by Ducks
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Written on 2009-05-19 at 02:34

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Morgan Cellohead
Brilliant. It's so easy to see it all happen - it's so understandable, even though it doesn't describe some everyday series of events. Definitely one of my favorites of yours.
2009-05-21


Kaede
I agree with both previous comments, and add that I like where you decided to use ellipses and where you did not.

excellent job
2009-05-20


Kathy Lockhart
your style kept me curious throughout waiting for the next line to reveal a little more of this event. The ending was mysterious which adds to the intrigue.
2009-05-19


Sun.Moon.Stars.Rain
Compelling and well-composed...I especially approve of your decision not to end your sentences until the very last one. Awesome write!
2009-05-19