Thanks! for good advise!




Love out of bounds

 

We came from different nations
from different era

but somehow

we were joined together
in the middle of time

 

You touch my heart
and I did seek

desperately

to find out
who you were


But fences

sky high

kept me
from finding out


and my longing for you grew
as time went by

and instead of laying down
in a bed of reconciliation  

my heart broke
in two

cause I
miss

you

 





Poetry by Marlinda
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Written on 2009-10-12 at 23:21

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Christian Lanciai The PoetBay support member heart!
I would suggest, "Love out of bounds", which would mean both love without limits and love in exile, – but please don't change anything. It's good as it is.
2009-10-13


jenks The PoetBay support member heart!
my advice is dont let language stop you leaping fences.
take the time and invest in good dictionaries and use good web translators for the fine stuff.
everything important enough should be done by eyes and body language...
have you guessed yet?
my lover is the same era...
different language :)
best wishes
linda
2009-10-12