inspired after some communication with a new friend - and with gratitude to them


Being


forced not to deny pure nature
nor conform with expected design
we grow freely toward the centre
of ideas that were once entwined
we shake fears, we make tears and we live
no false comfort from evil's repeat
as the toll of existence eases
nor longer is there need to retreat
the tannin river returns to crystal
and air alights with a fireworks glee
no soldier is there to refuse
this voice that longs to be free



Poetry by Eli The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2009-11-24 at 12:30

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Sounds like heaven.. and the last part is just, hanging on to my heart.. melts it, like the summer winds, gently melts away the winter.. so beautifully written! impressed.. *applause*
2009-12-05



lovely work Eli! We cannot deny our nature, or we suffer eternal strain, and imo, that is not the name of lifes game.

Smiling at you

Tai
2009-12-02


Purple Phoenix
The last two lines could well be my mantra, well written and thought provoking. Loved this write.
2009-11-25


P K Padhy
The poem "Being" is a classic example of metamorphical expression.The last line .. this voice that longs to be free is a testimony of being freedom.

P K Padhy, India
2009-11-25


shells
The positivity in this stand tall, keep growing, loved that fifth line.
2009-11-24


shells
The positivity in this stand tall, keep growing, loved that fifth line.
2009-11-24


Nils Teodor The PoetBay support member heart!
Beautiful!
To allow yourself
only to be
can set you free
and make you truly see
2009-11-24