Just randomly came to me
while listening to itunes.

~L.~


Remember, You're Not Licked Yet



When everything is getting rough
you always seem to be doing it tough
and you have just had enough...

..Remember I am here
to scare your fear
catch any stray tear...

..Life I know can be mean
crushing those who dare dream
but you still are a Queen...

..It's just a setback, you are not licked
So do not quit when you are kicked
I am your armor in any conflict.

11/03/10



Poetry by liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2010-03-11 at 11:12

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Brian Oarr
Welcome to the Pool, Liz. :-)

I'm assuming that's a typo and supposed to be "armor", rather than "amour" in the last line ... but I can't quite be certain.

I was was reading this as a motherly love/advice poem till that last line left me scratching my head.

Technically, I've alwasys had a fondness for tercets, which can easily be enjambed from stanza to stanza, something you might find useful to try sometime. It makes the poem sort of rush along.

Kudos to you for bringing your work to the Pool. We're starting to get a good core of writers posting in here ... from which we all can only benefit.

Brian

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2010-03-12