I was bored so thought I'd try the

forgive me challenge.

 

~L.~




My Selfish Ways, Please Forgive

 

 

 

Your heart into a thousand pieces,

unintentionally, I broke

I know the life,

from me, you want to choke.

 

But although many

careless things I do,

believe, please, that

really I didn't mean to hurt you.

 

Forgive my selfish ways

somehow,

please know your pain

causes anguish to my days.

 

I understand away from me you turn

in anger, hurt, disgust,

but before our bones turn to dust,

Can you please forgive me?

 

24/9/10





Poetry by liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2010-09-24 at 05:21

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Stan Cooper The PoetBay support member heart!
Hi Liz...if being bored promps you to write like this...by all
means, stay bored

xxx Stan
2010-10-07


Hans Bump
You always write brave poems,poems that turn your inside out and expose your soul. I admire that.
I do think you could polish up the format a little without sacrificing any of the compelling self confession.
Thanks again for your work. It connects with me.


Hans

Language: 4
Format: 3
Mood: 5
Overall: 4
2010-09-25


Rob Graber
This is certainly "colorful"!
PS: Does line 6 have a word left out? "things" maybe?
2010-09-24