those words


those words
like fruit from a tree
entangle the reader
in the mystery
until savoured
absorbed
with a tang
of bitterness
a pang of sweetnessness
so we know
those words are true
like you





Poetry by Eli The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2013-01-18 at 17:47

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Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
You've served up a delicacy, Eli, and I savored it
2013-01-20


countryfog
For many years I had a small orchard - apples, plums, blackberries and gooseberries - "tang of bitterness, pang of sweetness." Not only a magical place but a metaphor for life. Fine poem Eli.
2013-01-19



Wow, what an image to sup on: an entangling fruit! Beautiful and powerful image. Thanks for sharing!
2013-01-18


Rob Graber
I like this simile and how it is carried through. That's effective imagery!
2013-01-18