Say what you will.... :)


Depleted


the bankrupt brain
cannot compose
an incorrupt reason

it's not too big to fail
or fall to treason

liquidated heart
may purchase
naught but distrust

with insider trading
and a hint of disgust

souled out




Poetry by StillHoppin The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2013-05-02 at 02:48

Tags Bankrupt  Soul  Weird 

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Rob Graber
This is very clever and thought-provoking. Our brains are indeed not too big to fail, but they are way too big to carry around atop our aching spines to not put to use as best we can, eh?

The gentle use of rhyme contrasts nicely with the sharply edged meaning.
2013-05-03


shells
A clever piece which had me rereading and thinking, with a gem of a last line.
2013-05-02



I'm about to ask you what I've often asked your niece, lol... When did you get so smart? :)
2013-05-02


grizzedram
I like the multiple layers of meaning being written about here, or at least the analogies/allusions you use. Good work!
2013-05-02