grizzedram

2017-01-17
I had a friend with mental illness, and it was a long struggle to continue to be supportive when it felt like they were gone but not dead, though to steal your metaphor it also had moments where the sun broke through the storm clouds and things were almost normal again.

2013-08-23
Stark. I hope it does not come to pass. I choose to believe it won't. But I can easily see it happening. One of the reasons I chose to go into education.

2013-08-23
I like the line about the cigarette hanging like the things you should've said... badly paraphrased, sorry. But that line, most of that stanza, rings quite true. Often I end up smoking out in the dark alone feeling like that, though I've never articulated as elegantly as you have.

2013-08-23
When I read this I hear music in my head. Some kind of epic, possibly folk or viking metal. Seriously. It's like a more sophisticatedly written Amon Amarth lyrics. Note that this isn't a bad thing.

I appreciate the archaic style. Highly enjoyable read.

2013-05-03
This is beautifully written and very wistful... "I love the way we always lied about how we'd never lie to each other" is my favorite line, though this poem is chock full of them.

2013-05-02
I like the multiple layers of meaning being written about here, or at least the analogies/allusions you use. Good work!

2013-04-30
I like how you capture the diversity of words, and the power that they can have over people.

One question, though, was second line supposed to be "gentle"?

2013-04-30
sounds painful and like a really crappy situation to be in, sorry to hear about it

2013-04-30
The power was in you all along. Great message. :)

2013-02-14
That's a really cool form of poetry and I like the images this conjures up. Are you a farmer? Also, I had to look up the word 'beryl' and all I found were chemistry sites, which is awesome.

2013-01-24
I know it's been said, but this was absolutely beautiful because of the simplicity and grace with which it was written. Damn good job!

2012-04-10
Humans are surprisingly resilient to what can be heavy torment. Great poem.

2011-08-02
Congratulations! Good babies come from May, that's when I was born :)

Do you have a name yet?

2011-08-02
I like how the lines distill from complexity to simplicity. It's kind of laid out as a logical progression as well: just being leads to other things, in the end 'joy'. I don't know if it was intentional or not, but I appreciate it just the same.

2011-08-02
It's a hard lesson to learn, but one well worth learning. My earlier years would've been much easier had I known that people would accept me for who I was. Instead I hid away. Good write.

2011-07-08
Unfortunately reminds me so much of my experiences. Life is a beautiful suffering. Excellent write. The last line, as already said, is really powerful.

2011-07-08
Sounds like a bad accident. Luck (or fate) was on your side that night. Reminded me of my accident

2011-07-08
Hey, I really love the imagery in this, especially blushing skyline. I dig your work man.

2011-04-21
There is heartrending- brought a tear to my eye. Well done

2011-04-21
I think you captured the uncertainty of relationships very well in this poem, even after you've been with someone a while

2011-02-04
this is a beautiful poem. it reminds me of a quote from the movie The Fountain, which is spoken by a women dying of cancer-- quite poignant.

peace and love to you

2011-01-23
I like the organization of this poem. Sounds very zen

2011-01-20
That's a truly crazy (in a good way) story. Reminds me of James Herriot(sp?) books I used to read. Did they ever figure out why the cow didn't move to begin with?

2010-04-12
I like this poem a lot... but I'm sorry I cannot pinpoint why exactly. It's interesting to have daylight as an obscuring force rather than illuminating.

2009-07-06
I'm sorry, I'm not sure exactly why I like this so much, I just do. If it comes to me I'll let you know.

2009-07-06
it's like that in the US too...

2009-04-22
i love the imagery in this poem.