I had to come back to read this poem because I only read it for its form the first time, and the contents and feelings in your words are strong and hurtful and felt by the reader. You are a very good poet.
Ashe
2015-07-31

Jamsbo Rockda
You present that kind of situation so well. We end up carrying so much.
2015-07-22

countryfog
Very nicely done, a form I had not heard of, and it's intriguing, a sensibility and discipline akin to the Japanese forms dictated by syllable counts.
2015-07-20

I like it.
And it's very effective! :)
Ashe
2015-07-20

Ooh, an etheree!
I do love to learn new forms here :-)
Thank you, JA, for this excellent introduction. The opening is dramatic! It seems to lead to a mood of resignation, but the 'weight and waking nightmares' in the heart strike a powerful emotional note that continues to the end of the piece. Once more, we find ourselves applauding softly.
2015-07-20

shells
I've never heard of this form, you have done a brilliant job with a difficult subject.
2015-07-20