I just want to be me


Concrete flowers never bloom
not in the silence of this room
the moment has come
i can taste the air
nobody said that life was fair.

I carry my hopes in a plastic bag
along with the chains
that i've had to drag
and in the mirror
i see the crack in my mind
and watch the rest of my life
as it slowly unwinds.

Yet i still the venom
and put the stick away
and stop beating myself
into the end of the day
because life is a journey
it is not a test
i just have to learn
how to lay my fears to rest.

Maybe i could take out my brain
and put it in a tub
fill it with strong bleach
and give it a violent scrub
because i want it to be clean
clean of every thought
that cripples my existence
maims and distorts.

This life that i live
if that's what it can be called
i don't want to take my final breath
trapped behind these insidious walls
i just want to be on the outside
just outside and free
not inside this labyrinth
i just want to be me.


© Rik - 11/05/2006



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Written on 2006-05-12 at 21:52

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I really enjoyed reading this poem. All anybody wants is to be themself. The whole poem is great but I really like this part the most
"I carry my hopes in a plastic bag
along with the chains
that i've had to drag
and in the mirror
i see the crack in my mind
and watch the rest of my life
as it slowly unwinds."
Great poem!
2007-03-14


liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
This poem has hit me like a tunderbolt.

A really strong poem with excellent metaphors that produce brillent images.

bookmarked.

liz.
2006-06-30


Amanda K
to be your authentic self. you know such a theme never corssed my mind. i like it and relates to life.

all the best,
Amanda
2006-06-06


Daybreaker
Wow! You have really captured some truth here!

"Maybe i could take out my brain
and put it in a tub
fill it with strong bleach
and give it a violent scrub
because i want it to be clean
clean of every thought
that cripples my existence
maims and distorts."

Brilliant lines in a brilliant poem!

BOOKMARKED!
2006-05-14



Longing to be free from our limitations, to really become 100% "us"...
Again, you express feelings and thoughts that many of us (I believe) share or have shared, and you do it in a way that speaks directly to the depths of the reader's heart
2006-05-13


lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
hey rik you really made a strong statement here and so well crafted your range of skills as a poet is awesome sir well done just hope it helps rgds mike stay cool man
2006-05-13


Morpheus
Great piece of writing. I wish I had known you as a friend growing up, so I could understand how you incorporate amazing words that shake and move your poem to it's finality.

This verse is wonderful, especially when you say that your hopes are carried in a plastic bag.. So simple and disposable. Too often, our hopes and dreams are forgotten, and tossed aside as life progresses toward it's unknown conclusion.

""I carry my hopes in a plastic bag
along with the chains
that i've had to drag
and in the mirror
i see the crack in my mind
and watch the rest of my life
as it slowly unwinds.""

Really some great stuff. Thank you for sharing. Joel
2006-05-12


Malin Johansson
Wow I really loved this poem... the poem describes where I am right now... this is defenitly a favourite... Good work here... but hey, hang in there...
Rgds from me to you
2006-05-12