will you watch telly with me, please ?


i want to fuck until i cry
and
kiss your face and lips

be nose to nose
and
feel your breath on my face

dry the tears
and
lay in your scent

be wrapped up in you
and
imagine our future

share stories new and old
plan whats next, even if it's just tomorrow

i wanna know what i do not
and
i wanna know it now



Poetry by Holly Hawgood
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Written on 2024-02-20 at 22:59

Tags Confused  Love  Lust 

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R.W.S. The PoetBay support member heart!
I really enjoyed this one. It's bold, but still has a softness. I love the use of the language, personally. It grabs the reader, flows easy, and then closes with a similar energy to the opening. And there's something else. Is there an urgency? Anyway, this is a bookmark for me. Well done.

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2024-02-22


Inspired
This made me smile :)
The title is intriguing and it's such an easy read.

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2024-02-22


Uncle Meridian The PoetBay support member heart!
Wow! I generally flinch from poems that have "that word" in them, but I admire this one. It is forthright and strong throughout. There's an immediacy, a physicality. The poem grabs you! And I marvel that you wrote a whole poem using mostly monosyllables: only two words are disyllables, and two more are tri-. Sorry, geeking on technique! As an old song says, "Your technique, it leaves me weak"!

Language: 5
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2024-02-21


Griffonner The PoetBay support member heart!
I think a good example of poetry exemplifying passion. Straight and to the point One could say. If it were me I would do the last stanza differently, but that's what makes life so interesting isn't it - we are all uniquely different after all. :)
Blessings, Allen

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2024-02-21