If someone could explain this to me
I'd be grateful. I don't know what
it's about and I wrote it lol

~L.~


Untitled Wierdness.



A void of silent anger reigns,
Surrounded by air a hundred years stale,
Acid tears fall on desolute plains,
Seeing only her pitiful wail,
Doomed to walk Death's shadowy flames,
Crumbling mountains so frail,
Alone and stalked by failure pains,
That hammer is the final coffin's nail.

12/2/09.




Poetry by liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2009-03-03 at 03:28

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Thomas Perdue The PoetBay support member heart!
Congratulations on the editor's choice!

I like "acid tears", is that from a song, or did you make that bit up yourself? Was it perhaps song inspired at all?

Nice work, I like it. :-)
T.
2009-03-04


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2009-03-04


melanie sue
well, hope u don't take this negatively, but it kind of reminds me of someone writing while high on LSD, where the nouns have all become misplaced and jumbled, making it weird indeed. I REALLY do like this particular line for some reason(Doomed to walk Death's shadowy flames). But to interpret this, well, my best guess and what i get out of it, is the Earth's Destruction resulting from the environmental abuses mankind subjects her to. Well, you asked. LOL :)
2009-03-03