Precipice

I've gone too deep
to turn around now
and I wonder

is it worth altering
the balance upon which
I hang
one half above the precipice
the other bad footing

will the slide down
into the abyss
transform me
into a winged creature

or will it consume me
and destroy that
which I've wrought

I wish for the stability
of the ground
which does not shift
but rue it as well




Poetry by grizzedram
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Written on 2013-03-28 at 06:12

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F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
Being precariously perched on the ledge and wishing for something else but the usual fight to come are what your words evoke in my mind. The lines

"one half above the precipice
the other bad footing"

describe so well the fragile balance at stake. I enjoyed very much the way you've written this.
2013-03-29


Commentally Ill
"i got one foot on the platform, the other foot on the train....." (house of the rising sun)

nuff said.

c.i.
2013-03-29


countryfog
I'm reminded me of Nietzsche's quote: "When you look into the abyss the abyss looks back into you." "one half above the precipice / the other bad footing" describes it perfectly, and the ambivalence at the end is pitch perffect, any other ending would have destroyed this fine poem.
2013-03-28