Angst (Sturm und Drang Suite)

Energy ebbs flows
Waves of life in an ocean
I am but a drop

when the mind is blank
a monochromatic world
created within
Is it real or just a phase?
Color can admit a pain

I can't pinpoint it
that spark of distress
but it's there
somewhere
I still feel unfulfilled
But I can't pinpoint it
I want to wake up
take a step out
and breath the fresh air
but I'm still half asleep
and why?
I can't pinpoint it



Poetry by grizzedram
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Written on 2013-05-08 at 04:45

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This and "anxiety" reinforce each other. Something deep and troubling is coming into your writing. Perhaps the writing is cathartic, perhaps it's trying to put thoughts into words, always a good thing.
2013-08-19


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2013-05-11


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"I can't pinpoint it
that spark of distress"

Nor can I. This speaks to me. Excellent write.

~
2013-05-09



I was writing something similar to this yesterday but couldn't finish it so it's tucked away for another time. I think you've done an excellent job conveying the feeling here... Being unable to pinpoint the fog or something {whatever it is}. Well done.
2013-05-08