| Ramblings 556
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2021-05-30
I'm sorry to hear that. Hope you'll get to see a specialist soon and feel better. You're often in my thoughts. Take care. :)
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| Guzzle Poetry
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2021-05-30
Do you mean ghazal (pronounced as "guzzle," of course!)? I've tried writing some, and I think Tom has written quite a number of them--and they're excellent. My favorite poet who wrote many ghazals is Agha Shahid Ali. I'm attaching a link to one of his ghazals here: https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/43279/ghazal-56d221fe8a756
Hope you'll like it, Elle. :)
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| outside of santa fe
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2021-05-28
I found this work very curious, Jim. It starts almost Zen-like (with the lone speaker strolling in the pine woods; one droplet running down the neck), then it moves on to become a commentary on the philosophy of language. I too have been trying to preserve the image, in my writing, for a long time. And I like the dreamlike (poetic) and philosophy-like (analytical) sides of the poem. Well balanced.
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| Vaccine (follow up)
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2021-05-28
Oh, that must have been painful, but let's be happy that it's over -- and no other upsetting side-effects are seen. Yay! Congratulations on getting vaccinated. Sending you healing prayers from Kathmandu. :)
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| How Near to Fairyland
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2021-05-26
Beautiful. I'm always in awe of Japanese & Chinese poetry. So gentle and so unhurried. Thanks for posting!
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| Lonely
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2021-05-26
This is very sad yet so well-written. Losing loved ones is always painful. You've captured that emotion well, I and like the image of a "predestined train." Thanks for posting, and welcome to PoetBay again, Griffonner!
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| outside of sonoma
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2021-05-26
This is lovely, Jim! So very gentle and dreamy. It starts as a musing (of the speaker) on the conversations, intimacy, and confession. However, it ends with a philosophical idea: can one step into the same river twice, or "a deserted country road" in this instance? Maybe or maybe not. I like poems that are tinged with philosophical insights.
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| Retrospective
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2021-05-22
A fine (retrospective and contemplative) musing on aging and living! The last four lines sum up the poem's theme in a fantastic way! Nicely done, Joe. :)
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| Soggy spring!
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2021-05-22
Interesting wordplay on "may/May." Love it. :)
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| Life on Mars
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2021-05-19
This is very sweet and gentle and romantic. You take readers into a domestic sphere and make them wonder about the everyday yet so very poetic conversation. And, yes, the repetition reinforces what is already said. Good job, Elle. :)
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| Sunrise Wine
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2021-05-14
These snappy lines and short stanzas work really well. I like how each stanza carries the narrative forward, and the end rhymes make the reading more enjoyable. A perfect aubade, encapsulating the essence of early morning!
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| Morning meditations
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2021-05-14
What I love about this poem is your use of visual imagery, one after another--strung together as if beads in a rosary. The whole poem breathes, with so many fine lines, especially imagistic ones like: "A shadowed morning pierced by flaming rays."
Well written, Joe. :)
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| Vaccine Hopes
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2021-05-14
Getting the shot is live-saving, yet at the same time, it comes with some after-effects. Sending you positive vibes and hopes. Take care. :)
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| No excuses...
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2021-05-14
Been there, done that!
I've had a dry spell of late (and I usually do), followed by the occasional bursts of inspiration, and I can relate to this poem very much. A fine musing on the nature of creativity and writing poems.
Nicely done!
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| Climate Change
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2021-05-10
The repetition does make the poem interesting. Also, the rhymes/quatrain form work well. And love the reference of Dicken's "A Christmas Carol."
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| Between Walls
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2021-05-10
Williams is an old-time favorite. Thanks for posting it, Isabelle.
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| lost lines
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2021-05-10
I can relate to this very much, Jim. Some days I'm too tired to write and writing feels like a mere chore: a "form-fitted mediocrity" as you've written. Losing lines feels more ethereal, more sublime. Rightly captured!
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| Kevin’s Fantastic Powers
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2021-05-07
Ah, poor Kevin! That must have been a painful fall. A fun and sad as well as engaging poetic narrative--enjoyed reading it. :)
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| OPEN EYES
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2021-05-07
Words of the wise, Ken. Well-writ!
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| Uranus, The Magician
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2021-05-07
Beautiful.
Love the imaginative verses, each creative than the other. Just like a magician's work.
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| The Wood Thrushes' Song
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2021-05-04
This is nature writing at its best. And I think the form (freestyle sonnet) complements the theme. Also, I like how you've portrayed the transitory nature of life through the conceit of migrating birds, their sweet songs, the aural lapse, and the other noises filling in the void. All in all, splendid!
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| May Day!
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2021-05-04
Love the personification of the rain!
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| dark penumbra
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2021-05-03
There's something ethereal and dreamlike in this poem. I like the mood and atmosphere of this one. Very romantic & captivating!
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| Big shade from Jupiter ( A fun response to Pocket Planet )
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2021-05-03
An equally fun response to Coo & Co's poem. Loved reading both! :)
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| Attack From Within
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2021-05-03
Very true! These stanzas stand out for their honesty and poetic brilliancy!
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| on the other side of travail
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2021-05-02
Interesting to see how the poem begins with a certain difficulty in coming up with the right simile and ends with a beautiful one: "they are like birds in spring." The poem is both a narrative delight as well as a self-referential metapoetry. Beautiful!
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| planet lynn
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2021-04-29
Sweet.
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| on the floe
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2021-04-29
Age matters, of course! There was a time when I loved reading Plath, Sexton, et. al. but now their works don't move me much. I'm more attracted to the accessible kind: Philip Levine, Ted Kooser, Simon Armitage, Billy Collins . . . you get the idea.
A fine musing on the effect of age on reading habit!
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| Love, Silk and Oxygen
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2021-04-29
Ah, this is very beautiful. :)
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| Nocturnal Love
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2021-04-29
Beautiful.
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| I Would Kiss You
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2021-04-29
Ah!
How very gentle and unhurried. A delight to read.
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| Trapped?
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2021-04-29
I enjoyed reading your poem and watching you read it. A fine work. Thank you for sharing!
Bibek
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| missing
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2021-04-23
Deeply moving and profoundly poignant! I like how the second part of the poem complements the first and acts as a space for philosophical introspection. Of late, we all have been "missing" things we love/cherish. Enjoyed reading the poem, Jim, as always!
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| A Rhapsody in Blue
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2021-04-19
A beautiful and befitting tribute to the composer of "a rhapsody in blue."
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| Words fail me
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2021-04-19
Ha-ha, this left me chuckling! A humorous piece -- and a much-needed one amid these bleak times!
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| Ekphrasis: Poetry & Visual Art
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2021-04-19
Yay!
Thanks for posting, Isabelle. Hope the technical problem has been fixed on your end. :)
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| Moonlighting
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2021-04-17
Vivid and dreamlike. The short/snappy stanzas work well. :)
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| Promise of Sunrise
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2021-04-17
This is very beautiful, in love with the mood and atmosphere you've set here. And, ah, the last couplet sums it all: "I rest assured that today's intrigues / Will be less complex than yesterday's knots." Beautiful!
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| recipe
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2021-04-17
That's the perfect recipe for happiness!
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| I SET SAIL
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2021-04-13
I like it. You've extended the sailing imagery quite well. Bravo!
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| Packaged, Dried Instant Earthworm Ramen Noodles
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2021-04-13
Ha! This is hilarious! :D
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| Cautionary Tale
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2021-04-13
Like the extended metaphor of ship & shipwreck. Also, the end rhymes work well. :)
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| The Downpour —-revised
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2021-04-11
Very Zen-like. And, yes, I echo what others have said in the comments already.
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| Nature’s Grace
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2021-04-10
A fitting tribute to nature's beauty and grace. I like it immensely, Joe!
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| Haircut
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2021-04-10
I was smiling throughout.
Such a gentle and relatable narrative. And fun to read too!
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| Soft words from a broken sky
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2021-04-07
So gentle, so unhurried. An absolute delight to read!
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| Through a Window on a Sunday Morning
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2021-04-07
Such vivid word picture you've painted, Joe. I'm content to read and sigh!
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| Nature's Music
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2021-04-06
Beautiful!
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| Eyes
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2021-04-06
Great litany about "eyes." So many fine lines to cherish here, Joe.
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| we are not rooted
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2021-04-06
Very poignant.
Some people are married to a single land, while others are the flirtatious types, always in motion. Yet, ultimately, we're all alone.
Deeply touching!
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