| Peut-être ça qui fait la différence (Perhaps That's What Makes the Difference)
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2022-07-15
I'm so glad I checked in on poetbay today to find this. I love the honesty. I love the feeling. It's so raw.
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| gone
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2022-06-20
They're never gone from the heart, are they?
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| Like a Virgin
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2022-06-01
Your question.
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Her head.
Good laughs are hard to come by. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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| over
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2022-06-01
"Each cheek a page filled with praise."
I love this line. Wish I'd thought of it myself.
Thanks for sharing, friend.
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| Eridanus
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2019-04-29
Funny how memories present as a river would.
Thanks for sharing this one, friend.
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| Almost nothing
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2019-04-29
Well played, sir. Well played.
*wipes tears out of eyes.
I'm not crying, you're crying.
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| October Skies
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2016-10-24
Concise and elegant. Well done!
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| As You Always Do
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2016-09-24
Be still my beating heart.
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| 3 haikus I wrote today
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2016-09-24
Chaucer you're still here? Man I remember reading you years ago.
Glad to see you're still at it. Keep it up.
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| Goodbye Stephen
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2015-05-23
There's something to be said about using simplistic rhymes and everyday vocabulary. In this case it helps bring reality to a situation that others might not necessarily relate to, and for that I applaud your piece.
Also, I think it helps set a small-town/rural setting without even mentioning anything about the whereabouts.
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| Finitius
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2013-10-16
Icy wat u did thar.
Cool poem, man!
Good use of simple form for a broader idea, though the last line may still be a bit ambiguous for my liking... but hey, who the heck am I, right?
Applauded.
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| quiet am I
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2013-08-28
I like the scene, glad you could share it with us!
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| Northern memories
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2013-08-22
I'm digging the 1984 reference and blunt, fact of the matter, couplet at the end. I think it's interesting how cities are so often compared abrasively to natural beauty, and I can't say I disagree with the tone. One day, when all of us are gone and the cameras are watching the cities crumble beneath nature's indomitable will, life and creativity will no longer have to seem mundane or routine.
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| "as the sun misses the flower"
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2013-06-11
thumbs up! :)
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| Why does it feel
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2013-05-07
You're quite good at explaining the question. That's where it all starts. Define the question, ???, write a full and truly affective poem.
There's something to be said about leaving things open ended. In my humble opinion, however, to tackle a theme such as this without offering personal insight is almost cruel to the reader!
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| the abc's of panic
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2013-05-06
Interesting way of manipulating/interpreting stanzaic writing. I see what you did tharr... so to speak. Hopefully this sasquatch isn't squeaking either...
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| When I was Girl
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2013-05-05
Most certainly expressed clearly. I like the positivity that emanates from some of the more negative visuals, it's easy to catch hold for the ride.
Inner strength is usually indicative of inner triumphs, and the perspective here is one of quiet victory.
Regardless of my possible misinterpretations, I still enjoyed this write. Looking forward to more. :D
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| 12-Bar Blues (for Chaucer)
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2013-05-05
Ha! This is clever. I'm not super familiar with the Blues but you blend the titles together well into a story I think we all can find relatable. Looking forward to more from you. Thumbs up!
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| Visitors At My Window
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2011-07-15
I do indeed love the final stanza. Forget society in the name of solitude and internal exploration!
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| Well
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2011-07-15
to quote one of my favorite movies, "politicians use lies to hide the truth, while artists use them to tell it."
you have written truth, and thus there is a story to be discerned behind these short and adroit lines.
thanks for the post! looking forward to reading more from you.
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| Purgatory
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2011-07-15
perseverance, and a sense of trust you must build through the repitition of performing deeds you know to be good for you.
you have a talent for writing with power, absorb this power and use it to benefit the cause you battle daily.
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| Reading Write
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2010-01-10
Bookmarked. By far the best piece i've seen on Poetbay since I've joined. Thank you for this.
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| I Gotta Be Free
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2010-01-10
This is fantastic! I'd love to hear this with some guitar... Do you play? Record it!
By the way... It's good to be free, huh? :D Happy trekking sir.
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| Underwater/Above Water Chain Reaction
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2009-07-15
I like it :D and its true, we gotta save what we have started to destroy. the desires of humans don't surpass the necesities of nature. we've got the potential, we've got the technology, but humans won't change until their on the brink of destruction.
anyways, great write, i enjoyed it
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| Wimbledon 2009
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2009-07-12
I was considering writing something about Andy's disappointing loss! I felt so bad for him and Pete after such a close lost. Andy dropped serve once and it lost him the title, that's as rough as it gets.
Anyways, you do a great job of getting at the sport and I rather enjoyed reading your piece.
*an avid tennis player/fan*
Phil :D
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| I Will Remember You (Rhyme Royal)
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2009-01-08
hey man i like this alot.
all friends hit rough spots in their relationships, just gotta keep on truckin. real friends don't do anything you can't apologize for and forgive, otherwise i hope it all works out mate.
5 star write for something I can relate too.
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| Those are the answers I can give to you.
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2008-08-16
beautiful man..beautiful.
i can quite literally feel your love for this woman emanating through these wonderfully written stanzas.
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