danshäxan
Hi!
See my comments and impressions....
I have commented on the things i
like in particular. Your text has a
magnetic rythm and a strong content.
I like it! / danshäxan :-)

Futuristic






Surrounded by roses

shaped like hearts
(beautiful start)


~Smiling~



With a touch of tenderness

they release the chains
(this is lovely - like a prisoner getting free)


The chains of the impossibility

and opens the door

to the opportunity
(good follow up... with the door to opportunity)


~life~



Life is right in front of you
(like this line!)

The happiness is there too

you just have to open your eyes

cause it`s not always where

you would expect it to be....



But it`s there.....



Thought I would be safer

living without love
(really strong two lines above)

Cause love has caused me

nothing but pain

in the past....



But now....

the love I`m experiencing...



It`s big

It`s glorious

It`s emotionally overwhelming



And it`s mine



Looking outside

as the sun is rising



And I see....



~The future~
(happy ending - feels good)
2007-07-26

betsy Firefly
I just adore swans - as I did your lovely poem!
2007-04-11

salem
yes i agree living without love
is nothing
what a wonderful poem
great sense
thanx
2007-03-30

Kathy Lockhart
What a beautiful piece of artistic expression through your words and this photo. The heart shape created by these two swans is a lovely sight. I was struck by it as soon as I opened your page. And, then the sweetest, most sincere words that followed were pure pleasure to read. This I bookmark.
2007-03-30

weirdzarun
How marvelous! This is a fine piece. It has such a well crafted and original style! I love the italicized undertone and spacing, it all worked so well!
2007-03-30

Mr.Mist
A really nice poem about love. And the picture..I love it!! A greatly written poem!!!

BOOKMARKED

-mr.m
2007-03-30

kath
what a beautiful poem .. so nice the way it opens and folds ... telling opf hope and love ..

happy for your love that has surrounded you and made the future a baeutiful place

I bookmark this

best wishes
katherine
2007-03-30