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2005-10-11
i find it hard to see God as the one behind it... no, he did not intervene, but he also didn't intervene when we were nailing his son to a wooden post... i think his point would be, no matter his course of action, we will always find fault with him...
sad, life... but blaming it all on God, doesn't really help...
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| Changes
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2005-10-11
the capital H, does that make "Him" denote God, or merely that special someone, really it's not pinned down by the poem as to the subject, which is cool because the reader can translate it as they see things in their world... nice.
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| True Mirror
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2005-10-11
not so, in my humble opinion. guilt may take up most of the room, but somewhere in there, if you dig deep enough... is a gem.
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| Haji
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2005-10-11
thinking.... cast down fury... with a fury... at fury
;)
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| Still haunted
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2005-10-11
when does love not haunt?
this is a well-written poem, very much enjoyed :)
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| Friends
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2005-10-11
very sad, and a true telling of what many went through... we must never let these moments be lost to time, lest they happen again.....
beautiful, beautiful, beautiful....
:)
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| Forever Stalling
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2005-10-11
this is a powerful write, one of my favorites by you yet (which is saying A LOT, i might add, as you never fail to stun me with your words)... beautiful, this... and so true to love, the enigmatic feelings that it can bring.....
((((hugs))))
~me :)
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| SHOOTING STAR
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2005-10-05
shooting stars are ok. shooting people (bang bang, i don't mean lol)/shooting stars that are people... are what get to me. this is really good. :)
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| Lost In My Thought's
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2005-10-05
simple honesty here, is what it feels like... who is the one with the secrets, i wonder, you or them? because they sound so perfect by your description... anyways, nice write.
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| Mistakes.
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2005-10-05
we all make mistakes. perhaps it is something to do with being human. the wording of this is flawless... wow. write on.
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| Vision of Malmö
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2005-10-05
(trying to see the night as innocent) well i'm not sure on that one... but i suppose it has its moments :) what's malmo?
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| The battle of the Mind
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2005-10-05
none of us will survive... the question is just, how long it will take.
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| Will you love me?
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2005-10-05
i think we've mostly all of us learnt not to trust people, and the sad part is that, that in and of itself can push them further away.
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| Unsolved mystery
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2005-10-05
i'm not sure anyone can beat the fight of the unsolved mystery, and i'm sure many have died still trying. not sure what your unsolved mystery is, but it spoke to me in its own way just the same. i like it.
:)
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| It's a heart
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2005-10-05
emptiness and broken hearts do not feel good. a spell check would help some... but otherwise, an expressive, emotional poem... keep writing.
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| It's not so hard, really.
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2005-10-04
i'd like to see the last two lines switched, but that's a matter of personal taste... and yes, i am the only one who's ever lived, the rest of you don't exist ;P kidding...
life IS difficult. nice thought....
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| I'm so happy (when the sun shines).
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2005-09-24
hehehe it's been long enough i can rate it again :)
there was sarcasm in it? seriously? you're kidding.
what's sarcasm?
;)
your friend should be careful not to get a sunburn.
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| See my beauty
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2005-09-24
looking straight through the words, into the crying heart beyond, the beauty. this is nice. i would have to agree with the statement that you would do well to comment on others. the more people you see, are the more people that will bother and take time, to see you.
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| Seep
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2005-09-24
and hehehehehehehe at 'splashing piece' you make me smile :)
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| Seep
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2005-09-24
(tortuous) the right word (neverending rain, ever twisting in meaning)
torturous does not describe the rain, all the time ;)
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| LEAVES SWAY
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2005-09-24
leaves sway
and fall away
-rotting
(well there's a bright and happy thought for you... they never stay in the sky, it is always a short flight)
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| Beauty In Splendors
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2005-09-24
yikes, you're on a roll! i can't decide which i like better, the first one or the second, they're both so very wonderful. i like the hope of this one, though. nice.
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| Society Glitch
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2005-09-24
(gives you a hell-yeah) and a 5 ;)
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| I'm so happy (when the sun shines).
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2005-09-18
so let the sun shine in... face it with a grin, grinners never lose, frowners never win so let the sun shine in (i can't remember how the rest of it goes) prints this out and tears it up... you said to!!
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| Six Feet (Two Shy)
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2005-09-18
i think you need the other two feet, this didn't make much sense ;)
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| mysterious girl
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2005-09-18
let the emptiness be filled, with love.
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| making an entrance
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2005-09-18
(drags in the accordian) let's go......
georgey georgeeyyy george-o-oh
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| Chocolate Covered Cherries
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2005-09-15
yum, does anyone happen to have any chocolate cherry tree seeds??? :)
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| Less is not enough
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2005-09-14
knowing some who've sold their guitars (for whatever reason) i can appreciate the sacrifice made here, and am heartbroken as to what it was for... so very realistic, so sad, so true...
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| Silly games and slow dances
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2005-09-14
longing for the bride? i can't help but wonder...
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| I WANT TO SLEEP
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2005-09-13
indeed it feels as if you're talking of death here (to die, to sleep, no more, and by a sleep to say we end the hearache and the thousand natural pricks that flesh is heir to, tis a consummation devoutly to be wished, to die, to sleep, to sleep.......) sad...
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| Let Me Sleep...!
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2005-09-13
damn, this is good.
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| You should know
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2005-09-13
you should know, you're going to have to shave at least twice a month if it's really going to work ;)
:D
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| Title Number Three
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2005-09-13
defeated by emotions... a really cool thought. (and choosing illusions candidly, i like that part too)... but why five lines in the first stanza, and four in all the rest?
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| Title Number Four
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2005-09-13
okay... popcorn and chicken, sounds like a party.
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| oruko lonro ni
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2005-09-13
a beautiful write
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| Happy outside
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2005-09-13
i'm not sure know anyone who's truly happy on the inside, i think we've mostly all got blackholes right in the center. happy on the outside sometimes isn't even doable.
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| There is nothing left here for me
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2005-09-13
vacuum of thoughts, i can really relate to that right now. sad, this. i like it.
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| Internal words
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2005-09-07
infernal words, that people feel like they have to play these games (and indeed most really do...)
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| Teenage Crush
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2005-09-07
hahaha that's good.
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| Better return
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2005-09-05
makes me sad.
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| Shy
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2005-09-03
shyly leaves a comment, but makes it short
:)
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| The Geography of Him.
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2005-09-03
start to finish, just awesome
:)
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| Without a Mouth.
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2005-09-03
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| Be realist
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2005-09-02
real, not very fun at all.
but, real anyway
damn life
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| I Love You More
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2005-09-02
damn. this is gut-wrenching soul-pounding hellacious writing!
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| Vacant And Stained
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2005-09-02
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| Kiss of the night
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2005-09-02
i guess people always look at things through the shaded lens of their own perspective, and right now this poem just hit me like a piano falling from the sky. i like it. by the way,
what is higer? :)
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| note
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2005-09-01
shhhh
might break the illusion of illusion
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| surf's up
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2005-09-01
lol i wasn't kidding, i suppose. it was a record-breaking day for me, my all time 10 hr highest was 193 and i jumped up to 202, yay! for me. then again, there is far to go, one girl was telling me that occasionally she can pull out 270!!! (dies of shock, we're talking individual orders here!!) so now my 202 doesn't look that good, unless of course you're me, which i happen to be. yay, i'm dumb. :P
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