Weather of beauty

In this night
of discernable thunder

in the outskirts of the stillness
we hold each other

lightnings roll in silent arms

we contemplate the echo
sailing on the trembling play
of rain in our eyes




Poetry by Loke
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Written on 2009-01-11 at 11:26

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Doreen Cavazza
I really like this! I like the imagery of a couple embraced and enjoying the evening's rain storm and not caring that they're getting wet. There's something about your word choices and the way you put this together that gives it a certain sound--a certain feel. Nice job here.
2011-03-26



What a title! A very descriptive piece generated here, even to pause a moment in time during reading to appreciate the stillness present in a word created for the senses. Love the finale of rain in our eyes, very good word play. Well done.
2009-01-12


melanie sue
I enjoyed reading this very much . I like the nature metaphors you use to express the sadness....especially in the last line-rain in the eyes...very nice.
2009-01-11