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Eli

63 years old from Australia


The latest comments that Eli has written.

the unfinished ballad of

2024-04-09
<3


Just Like You

2023-08-27
Ha, that first stanza and I immediately related, those musty one piece libraries filled with books that nearly no one wants… nearly. Love the way you intertwined it with another relatable memory; sound dynamics when there ain’t much traffic. Musty seaside hotels. If I was Clever, and removed the “r” then made my way to the nearest coast I could almost guess which one. : )


Sadness

2017-04-15
So real. So lovely.


Nonsense

2017-02-25
I love the way you use words. No nonsense from me. Especially the last line.


Happiness

2017-02-20
Seems contrived. But each person has their own kind of happiness I suppose.


Wreckage

2017-02-05
This puts an ache firmly in my chest. I love the quirky way you play around with extended metaphor.


lucifer smiled

2017-02-04
Yes - so beautiful.


Far From Home

2017-02-04
This has a nice rhythm. I like to hear the song.


Thinking

2017-02-04
It's nice to see your words again, and to know that you are still thinking.


Falling in love again

2017-02-03
I like this outlook. Reaping the benefits of a feeling imagined, regardless of its current reality status. Loving for the sake of love. It feels as if I've done this from time to time throughout my life. Thanks for sharing.


Untitled

2017-01-31
It seems to go everywhere this, but in a few words from a couple of reads, it feels to me like a journey where the player locates and dances with different elements of their psyche and ultimately accepts the fate of who they are within the existence they have.

The nature of the text would allow for many interpretations I'd imagine. Such is the beauty of language, which I also enjoyed your use of.

Perhaps "journey"?, although that title could be used for many poems I'd say.


A Way

2017-01-30
I like this. I like the clear edges of symmetry too.


No lines

2017-01-29
I have a poem here somewhere that uses the same writing/drawing metaphor and follows a similar theme overall. Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed the connection.


Salt

2017-01-26
This is so beautiful.


My Aotearoa

2017-01-17
I love this.


Heaven or Hell?

2016-05-15
I like the play in this. Clever isn't the right word. Fun is more like it.


I'm coming home my friend

2016-05-15
This is great.


Lonely Park Day

2016-05-04
This text reminded be of the imagery in Conrad Aiken's Chance Meetings. I like the way you create life with your words.


Bullying

2016-03-30
This reminds me of Ishle Yi Park's "Love Poem To Myself".

Beautiful,

Thanks.


A Losing Battle?

2016-03-30
I should read more of your writing. Thank you.


Fus

2016-02-23
I had an OMG moment. Thanks for sharing.


Conductive

2016-02-22
Beautiful.


Life

2016-02-16
Concise, sharp and real. Cool.


Sinking Again

2016-02-16
Beautiful Bella.


Pastel Sadness

2014-11-11
I would have to agree.


Odds are

2014-11-01
Questioning the conventional - the purpose of the poet. I admire the way you have done this in so few words. Thanks.


Regrets

2014-07-22
Some might see this dialogue as plain, but there is power in truth, even if it is not your own.

Thanks.


Drunk

2014-07-21
This is great.


My today

2014-07-20
And ultimately we are left with a choice; to explore or not to explore - "to be or not to be".

I know this feeling well, and sometimes wonder how much easier it would have been to remain unconscious, ignorant or just simply and blissfully unaware, and at times I even envy those who seem to show these characteristics of painlessness. I guess once the choice is made though, there is no stepping back, although I also wonder if choice actually has anything to do with it in the first place. My own desire to explore certainly never felt like a calculated decision; more so it feels like one that fate has designed for me due the particular circumstances of my life, and maybe through a high genetic disposition to look for answers to the mystery I believed was awaiting me.

Thanks for sharing this - it's always good to read something that provides a connection.


Cheers

2014-05-10
These beautifully crafted verses help me feel less alone.

Thanks.


Suffocating

2014-03-25
Very powerful.


Discovery

2014-03-21
You need to take more risks.


Chewing the invisible umbilical cord

2014-03-21
This is beautiful, so dark, deep and intensely beautiful – which is where I tend to find beauty.

It reminds me of subliminal images I had as a child and which faded as childhood left me. I swear I have memories of being in the womb, but I'm not sure if anyone would believe me, or if I could describe it to them properly anyway.

This poem at least tales me back to those faded images, and that is a very powerful thing.

Thank you.


Snap Shot

2014-03-21
<3


Hush

2014-03-21
This quite stunning. I don't have any more words... except thanks for posting.


Beluga

2014-02-05
Beautiful.


autumn encounter

2013-11-13
Thanks for sharing this, it encourages me to see.


Mary-Jane

2013-11-07
I agree with Jim.

Vignettes displaying big pictures. I love them.


Keeping it fresh

2013-10-03
I wish I could engage in this challenge but now is probably not the best time; my brain isn't working the right way right now. All the same, these words are beautiful; more beautiful to me personally than you could possibly imagine - or perhaps you can.

Either way, thank you dear poet friend.


Fear

2013-08-22
Nice one Bella.


Badasht: The Responsibility on the Shoulders of the Youth

2013-07-26
And bewildered we are.

Your learning is warmly appreciated, and the ripple of your intent - your future influence - has me feeling better about the world I will leave behind one day.

Thank You.


When we were together...

2013-07-21
Wow!


Moonlight

2013-03-11
Nice. : )


The Literati

2013-03-11
I love it.


Can't Cry Anymore

2013-01-21
Often it is "ramblings" that tell the truest stories, and there is so much in here that I connect with.

It took me many years for my own tears to dry, and yes, they have made me stronger.

Thank you for sharing this, I'm not sure if you yet understand just how powerful your words are. If not then one day you will.


Wishful thinking? What is missing? What about . . . Part I

2012-11-26
Yes I smile. You make me smile with your words so rampant, reminding me of me. Yes I smile because you make me smile... but you also make me think, and that makes me smile even more.


Life

2012-11-26
My daughter is almost twelve, and she thinks like you.

I hope the questions never end.


Dragonheart

2012-10-26
I love your dragon-tinged poems.


When pain was love

2012-09-13
Your words are very real.


Dragonsegg

2012-09-10
Lovely