| Im Sorry
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2007-11-19
this is very beautiful and so true, we cannot let our love from the past affect the love we have right now -
excellent message in this beautiful poem!
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| e-lationship
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2007-04-12
This is sweet and so true:)
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| Insanity's Plea
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2007-04-11
Wow, I love your poetry, this
one speaks to me, I have felt like this before,
my dreams lost and I just want to start new,
wanted to start my life over,
this is an excellent write:)
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| Little Pearl
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2007-04-05
Oh, this is so sweet!
Just beautiful, flowing
and filled with love and emotion! :)
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| Romance by stealth
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2007-04-04
What a great idea! I love this, I wrote a poem once similar to Rob's comments on a painting with 'sensory imprints', thanks. :) I think this would work with poetry too, it sure makes for more in depth comments and you have more of an idea what people take away from your poetry. :)
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| Sensory Imprint
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2007-04-04
This is interesting...I'm going to read your other poem again... :)
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| The Arbutus
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2007-04-03
Oh, I just love your poetry, I have the Gazebo one bookmarked
and this is amazing too.
Embrace the beauty of the trailing vines,
like a virgin that entices,
yet innocent and pure, bashful and timid
while the scent of the smiling strawberry bud...
~ I love these four lines.
I would like to add you as a writing friend so I know when you've posted something new. I should fave. you at allp. too if that is okay,
I really like your work! :)
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| Alice Begins
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2007-04-03
Just one more comment:
your rhymes of
malice
callous
Alice
Brilliant, love those.
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| Alice Begins
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2007-04-03
This is such a mixture of emotions!
Wow, this is good, I think you are
the second best person at writing
these, besides Ian, lol. :)
went to cry
sweet mirth awoke
lift's my soul to harmony
symphony plays mind erasing malice
callous cruel demon cannot harm Alice
I like how you have really put yourself in this poem,
use of your name is excellent.
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| Romance by stealth
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2007-04-02
This is beautiful, so true
of the romantic poets. :)
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| The Lonely Disease
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2007-03-31
This is my favorite one of yours so far,
God, I love this. I love the honesty of it,
This is really good, every line, every word
and the way you formed the sentences to build this poem.
I'm trying to pick a favorite line or stanza,
but it's hard because I like them all!!
you played patience while I vomit insecurities
leaving me in the haze of the New York skyline's
These do stand out, though:)
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| Bite
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2007-03-31
Love this,
Yes, you alliterate well,
freak fetish fantasies.
~ like that line!:)
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| Cocaine Demon
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2007-03-31
I can relate. A very good poem.
I numb your heart and own your soul
~ so true, like a demon.
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| To Blue Lady
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2007-03-29
This is so beautiful, I enjoy the old pronouns in this poem!
You write poetry that suits them. This has beautiful imagery in every stanza! :) Flow and rhyme excellent as always:)
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| Timeless Rose
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2007-03-29
What a wonderful idea to do a mini rose series, I will have to read them all! :)
This one is beautiful! I love mini roses, I love this part:
Timeless Rose
Like rain, beauty falls from the heavens
You show strength in times of adversity
A rose so worn by time itself
Yet radiant by springs showers
Petals that hold care and promise
No force can alter your infinite glow
You're truly are a timeless rose
hehe : all of it:)
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| red dart
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2007-03-29
Oh, wow, I love this, Red dart, a wonderful metaphor for this woman.
A seductive and stylish poem.
I really like your work, I have added you as my writing friend too:)
Thanks for adding me:)
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| moon girl
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2007-03-29
I can't believe this has been read 69 times and only 4 people have commented! I think this is an amazing poem! :)
You need one more 'o' in :
here one moment, gone too soon.
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| Like Pearls and Stars
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2007-03-29
I love triolets. They are my favorite,
this one is excellent, I love it.
A kiss with beautiful imagery!! :)
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| In The Warmth of You
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2007-03-28
This is beautiful :)
In the poetry of your words,
I am cradled by the beauty,
Enhanced by the purity of their meaning
As they wash over me
Leaving me alive in their care
~ I like these lines. :)
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| Spring Dance
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2007-03-27
The is beautiful. Wonderful flow and rhyme.
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| I am but a tiny bud...
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2007-03-27
Oh, I like this, especially that last stanza!
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| *In Worship of Your Beauty*
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2007-03-26
This poem is so beautiful and serene, I love the title.
All of our tender kisses spent, a treasury.
Our love has now become an unprinted story,
But the rush of ecstacy lives on forevermore,
~ I like those lines.
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| TAGS OF LOVE
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2007-03-25
I like this. There are many kinds of love.
I feel that plain commas might be less distracting for puncuation:)
I like the title, it's catchy, and I like this line: The caress on a baby's fingers; ~ beautiful.
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| Heavenly touch . . .
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2007-03-25
An interesting poem. I like the mood.
I think it should be life is too big - with 2 o's though.
Under the breath of heaven
I was dead and down
under the sky of illusions
I was stroked out
~ this stanza is amazing
~ I love the title.
I always pay attention to titles, lol.
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| Love Indulgence
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2007-03-25
The searchlight in life's deepest storms
~ I like that line.
The last two lines make me happy.
This reads like a song, too.
And I LOVE the title!!!
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| A Little Breeze
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2007-03-25
I love this short rhyme.
It's beautiful and packed full of imagery.
So delightful! :)
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| 48) His Touches
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2007-03-25
Wow, wish I felt this way when touched! Nice descriptions!
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| In my heart...
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2007-03-24
I love your work. I love your flow and rhyme!
This is beautiful.
Your poems flow out in cyberspace
and make this world a happy place.
~ yours do too:)
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| My Garden
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2007-03-21
I love this, it is just beautiful, it makes me feel like I am right there in your garden! I love 'There's a mist of colour and a sea of scent.
A bit of Heaven that God has lent. '
I can't wait for summer now!
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| A Gazebo's Magic
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2007-03-21
Reading it again, i just love it, lol!
Yes, great flow and rhyme to this.
You might want the second to last 'I' capitalized.
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| A Gazebo's Magic
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2007-03-21
Definitely bookmarking this one!
This is absolutely beautiful!
Fantasy swirls, blossomed romance ascends
Hovering in an ethereal grace.
All wonderful lines and language throughout
this sonnet. A very good sonnet!
I love what you did surrounding a gazebo.
(I saw that contest, lol)
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| IF ONLY...
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2007-03-21
This is a very beautiful poem.
The songs of angels as they dance on high;
Love grows by giving, the love we give away,
The measure we keep. ~ love those lines
I actually enjoy every line, I like the line:
hips could shake to the lyric,
This poem is visually pleasing to the eye too,
on the page. It is light, but deep.
I like the eyes of out hearts.
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| Going Down
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2007-03-21
Oh, I just read Ian's comment, nevermind! lol!
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| Going Down
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2007-03-21
I like this. What is this form? Villanelle?
tasteful ardor hugs insecurities;
cascading cunnilingus carnal flare ~
Nice alliteration. Nice imagery!
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| SHE IS GONE.
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2007-03-21
WOW, I found this poem very intense. Well written and I liked the 'saints could coin' part.
She is gone and gone
Just like the childhood fantasies do!
Sad. A good poem.
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| For My Diamond
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2007-03-21
A pilot lost in the sky, contemplating your instrument's real use,
I like that metaphor.
Very nice. A good write to a friend!
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| Jonaay
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2007-03-21
Vamoose, good word!.
I like this, I like your style of freeverse.
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| Your Voice
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2007-03-20
This is very beautiful. I love the imagery in this poem.
It is a happy poem and you do these so well!
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| Thanks For Rain
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2007-03-20
'I am emotional...
My feelings fluctuate from chorus to verse'
I love this, I can totally relate.
Great poem!
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| Dance of the Dead
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2007-03-19
breezes laugh, darkness twists
the graveyard grips and cries.
Ooh, this does a eerie tone to it!
i like this one.
Tumbling old gravestones
begin their hoary dance.
Interesting mood to this one,
It's dark but from a point of view of
someone who loves graveyards.
Very nice!
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