| Its called love
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2013-01-06
Ah, love...we need to be in love all the time, otherwise we wither.
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| In this instance
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2013-01-06
I love the way you poem ends,"I am locked between oceans and you". Love is a single emotion which cannot be explained even in a thousand ways...
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| BE YOURSELF
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2011-12-17
EXCELLENT POEM!
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| Melt
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2011-10-07
Like it!
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| Rude Spider
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2011-10-07
Funny, even I notice ants when I am all alone by my self!
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| Veronica
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2011-10-07
Excellent piece of writing.
I like the simplicity and flow of language and thoughts.
Saving this as a bookmark!
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| The Disease
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2011-10-07
Nice narration...
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| Visiting Hours
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2011-09-28
Yeah...I remember the time when I was in the hospital...well picturised with words!
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| Leafs
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2011-09-28
I like the sounds and sight of rain in the poem!
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| Speaking Portuguese
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2011-09-23
Yeah...I too live in a place where the spoken language is foreign to me and its exactly the way you described...
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| Boredom
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2011-09-20
Hmm...well expressed.
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| Oedipus for the Modern Family
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2011-09-20
"......"!
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| Do your Worst - This Strength is Mine
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2011-09-20
Lovely ;-)
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| The Wake-up Call
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2011-09-17
Funny recap!
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| Night and Day
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2011-09-17
We often take teeth for granted, but good you reminded me...
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| Longing
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2011-09-17
Letting go of someone is very difficult. Turn your mind towards arts, start painting it really takes long time, and can fill in the emptiness....
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| Frying Ants
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2011-09-16
I love the rich imagery!
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| On Being Dead
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2011-09-16
Is heaven like that?
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| Vipers
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2011-09-16
Me too...
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| Silent
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2011-09-15
I live in a flat now, and miss the garden in my previous house.
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| Rain
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2011-09-15
very crisp writing.
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| The Woman
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2011-09-15
we see a lot of faces everyday. Sh's being nice, perhaps, because you are nice...
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| Little Yellow Sweet
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2011-09-15
So sweet!
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| The Everlasting Light
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2011-09-15
I also dislike LED lights!
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| Swish
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2011-09-15
Is that an English ballroom gown?
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| Missing Note
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2011-09-14
Very touching!
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| Vultures
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2011-09-14
A seroius beginning with a very funny ending!
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| Like a Thirsty Child
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2011-09-14
Yes, the words/thoughts are precious.
Love your simple poem, and its flow.
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| Poem in the Dark
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2011-09-14
I love the simplicity of your style!
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| New to the site so thought I would offer this...
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2011-09-14
I can understand that you feel so vulnerable. But, this is no exam. I bother the least about meter, structure and rhyme when I publish. You seem so hyper-sensitive to critics. Com'on, just feel free. I know that all art is craving for love. Your obsession with being "liked" is so mmuch that it could make or break your day. I advise you to read more and write more, make your language and thought-process more crisp. And experiment different styles until you develop your own.
All the best!
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| Today's Tomorrow...
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2011-09-14
I don't believe this. Even this poem has fragments of my "future,present and past" and of "solitude" and "computer/internet". Wow!
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| we are lonely...
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2011-09-14
Your poem also is about solitude. I am reading this only now, strange that we all are sailing in the same boat....
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| when I was young and strong
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2011-08-06
Such great imagery! I almost swam along with you in my imagination!
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| The Ballad of the Fruit of Wisdom
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2011-05-12
Beautiful attempt Rijutha.
You achieved to pen down the story with such a smooth flow of words. Keep writing and sharing!
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| An Abandoned Girl's Song
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2011-05-12
Never! A mother cannot abandon her little girl.
Just love the melody and the beat in it.
Beautiful message. It is sad to see that the girl child is disregarded in our part of the world. With a ratio of 700 females to every 1000 males in Haryana, they is a dearth for women.
Your poem should become the anthem of India.
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| Born Free
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2011-05-12
This poem makes any woman so proud!
I love the rebellious attitude you express.
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| A Little Child's Quest
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2011-05-12
Very beautiful thought process!
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| DON'T FORGET
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2008-07-07
Excellently said Smitha. Yes, a husband and wife should be so many things to complete each other.
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| DON'T FORGET
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2008-07-07
Yes, its true. A woman who can be all that you mentioned only can be a true partner for life. There are many facets to a single relation. My daughter can be my mother and grandmother too. And sometimes parents too can think or behave childishly. An excellent poem which throws light on how a human being is bonded to another human being. Beautiful!
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| Goodbye to Poetbay and To all My dear Friends (See you later)
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2008-06-13
Every goodbye ends with an open ended question suggesting that there is hope of seeing again. So, we will meet you later. Good luck for your studies. As you said, once you perform well, you can always catch up with the bay!!
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| Silent Sobs
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2008-04-25
I understand how painful a memory of someone can be. I am touched. Love, Neelima
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| EFFIGY OF OURSELVES
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2008-04-08
Thats life which is running like a pulse. But the true beauty of life is in the quality time we spend in self exploration, not just in survival.
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| fusion
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2008-04-08
Very racy and is a collage of words.
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| Sleepyhead - Awake!
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2008-04-07
An applaud for you. I also love waking up little ones with kisses and hugs. They look so sweet and innocent. Your poem portrays just that!
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| Pain and Fear
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2008-04-04
Hi Esti, I am so touched, your poem brought tears to my eyes. Someone close to my heart is going through this feeling, with cancer. I want you to know that I am there for you. Love, Neelima
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| Unspoken
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2008-04-04
Lovely lines. The unsaid words are so many, that each of us can easily run into books...and yes, that familiar cologne gives a sense of togetherness...women are usually "smell-factories" and the perfume industry survives by trying to please and seduce their olfactory senses...
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| WHAT HAPPENED TO GRAMMER?
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2008-04-03
Beautifully said.
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| haiku
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2008-04-03
very pithy and picturesque!
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| Way to you..
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2008-03-31
Wonderfully said!
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| Hidden
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2008-03-31
A woman is a closed flower bud. Very mysterious. Beautifully expressed. I love the double play/picture of words.
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