| Either Way
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2025-03-19
It seemed to go on and on
or was it short and sweet?
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| March
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2025-03-19
Lovely poem.
he likes to hear her dance
like skittles across his heart - great lines.
rises to her eyrie in the sky - do you need "in the sky"?
If tattoo's is a verb then you wouldn't need the apostrophe. But maybe it isn't.
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| Loose Fit
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2025-03-10
Very good, I know the feeling.
I'm not so sure about anything anymore;
of that I'm certain
Love that.
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| A New Place A New Time
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2025-03-10
Enjoyed the read, I think the first three stanzas are very good.
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| That Moment With Him
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2025-03-10
I think he's right. There's always a few people who need no provocation, but the rest of us are spurred on by religion, nationalism, idealism. Do you mean posed or poised demeanour?
A posed demeanour would be less convincing, perhaps.
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| Alternative Medicine
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2025-03-10
Thanks, Allen.
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| Unconscious Resolve
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2025-03-07
Yeah, hindsight is a wonderful thing.
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| boreas
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2025-03-07
i mean prowl - not sure what that's about, but the rest I found entertaining.
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| Unconscious Resolve
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2025-03-07
Interesting read, but I think it goes on far too long. For my taste I'd end it on "hard kitchen floors".
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| Against The Spread
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2025-03-07
Thanks Allen. Your take is not that wide of the mark. I remember it was written during Covid, some kind of diatribe against the pursuit of private profit versus the needs of public health. But to be honest, I don't understand all of it myself.
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| WHOSE WILL BE DONE?
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2025-03-06
Good poem. I don't quite get the relation of the protagonists to yourself, sister and her lover? Anyway, it reminded me of certain passages by Dickens or George Eliot.
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| Why I am So Miserable
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2025-03-06
Enjoyed the read, though perhaps the bleeding travels in the opposite direction.
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| Afterlife
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2025-03-05
Thanks, Allen.
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| Afterlife
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2025-03-04
Thanks all.
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| The End of Humanity as We've Known it
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2025-03-03
Hmm, I do wonder if the Earth was ever peopled by self-guided, independent beings. Long way back, I suspect.
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| artificiAlly intellIgent
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2025-03-03
Interesting poem, though it kind of embodies my feelings about AI in general - a lot of How, but not much Why. Information but not enlightenment.
I navigate through a realm where - do you need "through"?
I find presence in every device, - I am present?
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| A Vibe, Perhaps
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2025-03-02
This used to happen to me, but I was a Mental Health Nurse at the time...
Some people do have a kind of empathetic aura about them, I think. I don't, but my wife, perhaps. But to pick up on another point, I don't think it's true that people who have experienced much pain and trauma themselves, are consequently understanding of others' experiences. I imagine it can go one of two ways.
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| Adultery
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2025-03-02
Ha! Well, let's say I was drawing attention to this kind of behaviour rather than commending it as exemplary. But also, I was struck one day by the word "adultery", how it belies itself, or if you like, adulterates itself.
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| Yin and Yang
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2025-03-02
Enjoyed the poem.
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| As we depart
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2025-03-02
Enjoyed the poem, the moon's always ripe for metaphor. Maybe As We Part would be a more apt title.
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| No Worries
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2025-03-01
I'm not quite sure what you mean by "poles" - crutches? But anyway, I get the drift. Independence is important, enjoy it while you can.
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| Adopting At Our Age
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2025-03-01
Thanks Allen.
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| A Thorough Cat
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2025-03-01
Thanks Isabelle.
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| wonder of wonders
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2025-02-28
Enjoyed the read, an unexpected ending. I'm left wondering what
exactly is the trinity of her body.
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| Last Of Alice
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2025-02-28
Enjoyed very much, especially the first verse, despite the errant comma..
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| In Between Here & Now
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2025-02-28
Maybe it does last way too long but I enjoyed the trip. I saw glimpses of The Beatles and Leonard Cohen as well as Dylan.
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| A Thorough Cat
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2025-02-28
Thanks both.
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| Kim Kardashian’s Arse
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2025-02-27
Thanks Albert.
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| Glowing Coals
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2025-02-26
Enjoyed the read. The Versailles sentence is a bit of a mouthful, mind. Yeah, it's enough to make a man want to kill somebody. If I only thought I were clever enough to get away with it.
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| Kim Kardashian’s Arse
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2025-02-26
Thanks all. The rhythm and rhyme scheme are based on Dylan's Tombstone Blues.
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| One of Many Fools
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2025-02-25
Hello Lawrence. I doubt that he sympathises with the Russians, more likely he and his henchmen have their eyes on all those minerals needed to keep Silicon Valley happy.
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| The Devil Walked Out
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2025-02-25
Enjoyed the poem, though it feels like something should be rhyming with "organise it".
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| Lucy’s Song
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2025-02-24
I see what you mean, Lawrence. The repetition of "it" in the final couplet jars a bit. There's little point in giving Charles Dickens advice but here goes, anyway -
The peace once known
It can never regain.
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| Lesson 60
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2025-02-24
Hello Sameen. Enjoyed the read, 2nd stanza especially. Man to maggot - interesting phrase.
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| [soft]
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2025-02-24
Hello Uncle, enjoyed the read, made me laugh a few times. Can't beat a good satire.
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| A Day Unresolved
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2025-02-24
Thanks, D G Moody.
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| A Local History Facebook Group
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2025-02-24
Thanks Allen. The "poem" is based on a real Facebook thread, which I've embellished here and there. I suppose I'm trying to convey the vacuity of such exchanges, how nostalgia and neediness eventually assert themselves. I no longer use Facebook, obviously.
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| I don’t feel like a writer
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2025-02-23
Enjoyed the read and I can empathise emphatically.
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| IN THE END GOD WAS KIND TO HER
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2025-02-23
That's an interesting, complex poem. Worth the read, I understand enough of it, I think. Do you mean Mumbles, as in Wales? So the black dust is coal?
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| Au revoir
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2025-02-23
Hello Isabelle. Good poem, love the final couplet.
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| A Day Unresolved
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2025-02-23
Thanks Isabelle. It's meant to be about anxiety, sleeplessness, a nameless dread, I suppose.
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| Immortal Lines by an Aging Poet
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2025-02-23
Hello Ngoc. I think the 3rd stanza is much better. Not so sure about 2nd stanza, it would help if the original version were still there to compare with.
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| Immortal Lines by an Aging Poet
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2025-02-21
Hello Ngoc. Interesting poem, lots to think about. The time/lifetime rhyme jarred a bit, perhaps too perfect.
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| i know i have a pen
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2025-02-21
Hello Aidan, love the first stanza, the notion of the ground saying no, fighting back.
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| His Piano Sings My Heart
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2025-02-21
Hello Kee, enjoyed the read, some inventive loose rhymes,though drives/appears is very loose indeed.
Where purpose touch gladly - grammar problem there, "purpose touches" "purposes touch"?
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