John Lambremont, Sr.

2009-11-16
I really liked the way this one flowed, a loping pace, very consistent with the season and theme.

2009-11-16
It is rare that a message so profound is ffound in a verse so lovely.
Outstanding and bookmarked.

2009-08-22
Heartiest congrats, Stan, on the new arrival and on this poem, very poignant and touching.
I'm not yet a grandfather, but I've always been Grumpy!

2009-08-22
This is one of your best efforts. The images are sharp and very effective.

2009-08-10
Very thoughtful and evocative. Just remember that there is a bit of paradise in every day; don't let it escape your attention.

2009-08-01
Very gripping, I like.

It's the 2-party system that's a big part of the problem. We need more and viable choices.

2009-08-01
Nice sentiment, Stan, it gave me a smile.

You're forever famous here!

2009-07-28
Very pastoral, I like this a lot.

2009-07-25
I try, but my dreams are strange anyway.

This has a real easy feel to it, very pleasing. A nice read.

2009-07-16
I had this experience once. A friend's alcoholic father left us (age 12) at an isolated bayou fishing camp for a weekend without food or money. I remeber being hot, hungry, mosquito-bitten, and scared.

Your poem expressed this feeling terrifically. Thanks.

2009-07-16
The tone of the poem helps underscore the theme/message. Nicely done, a very good read.

2009-07-15
Nice job, Stan. Thoughtful and playful at the same time.

2009-05-01
Ya got me. Good one.

2009-04-29
Phyllis, this is not only very dear, but wonderfully reflects in the language the gentleness of the text's emotions.

I do suggest this be broken into verses for better effect.


Great stuff!

2009-04-20
Well put. I don't see how certain scumbags seem to be able to ignore this simple truth.

2009-04-18
Ditto what they said below.


Nicely done.


John L.

2009-04-18
Nice expression of a poet's anxiety and desires, but needs a bit of seasoning like that provided in the first line.

I too try to write at least one poem every day, and by doing so, one pushes or reaches the level of mediocrity or even crap. It helps to externalize; don't try to write all the time about your deepest inner feelings; look around to observe things that make you react, and write about how that makes you feel, even if the feeling is superficial or transitory.

I wrote my first acrostic poem some months ago in the state you describe and as an expression of same; the result was that I was taken down a side road that led to my writing 75-plus acrostic poems; in fact, my next book will be all acrostics.
So don't be afraid to try something new or foreign. The Editors Challenges on here are very good for that; I really like them.


Here's that first acrostic poem I mentioned above:




A big blank


Whether 'tis noble
right or wrong
it is your lot
to play your song
ever your hands
reach for the notes, yet
silence results

But you press on and
look with unease
only today you
can't find the
keys




Just keep writing, David...

2009-04-14
I'll believe it when I don't see it.


Take a break and keep writing, old buddy.

2009-04-03
This poem was used by the Heptones in their 1973 release "Book of Rules." A beautful, sweet reggae song...


Book Of Rules
by
The Heptones
Album: Deep In The Roots Released: 1973Get the Ringtone Listen/Buy @ Amazon Get the Sheet Music Send "Book Of Rules" Ringtone to your Cell Submit Lyrics (you have to register, but it's harmless) Rate This Song
Songfacts: You can leave comments about the song at the bottom of the page.

Jamaican band The Heptones recorded a number of different versions of this song - not all have the verse "Look where the rain is falling from the sky." This verse was added by The Heptones to the original poem by R.L. Sharpe A Bag Of Tools, which the song is based upon.

Bobby & the Midnites, a 1981 studio album by Grateful Dead singer and guitarist Bob Weir, contains a cover of this song. It has also been recorded by Desmond Dekker and Inner Circle. (thanks, Ken - Naivasha, Kenya, for above 2)

2009-03-07
The second one is a gem and a keeper. Applaud and bookmarked.

2009-03-07
A serious subject, but I'm LMAO. Sorry.

2009-03-07
Good stuff, educational and fascinating; thank you.

2009-03-05
And Love comes in giving away all of one's self.

See? You made me think!

Nicely done.

2009-02-26
Mine is completed and posted.

2009-02-23
Nice tension here between revelation and resignation.

Downright spooky, too.

2009-02-19
This one made me giggle and gave me the munchies.


oops!

2009-02-18
A very timely topical poem...

2009-02-18
Good one!

2009-02-18
Time for a fibonacci challenge. What say, editors!

2009-02-17
This is a very human, very gripping story that needs to be fleshed out more fully.

Two things. There are sentence fragments, particularly in paragraph one. Prose, unlike poetry, should (for the most part) be in complete sentences.

Also, there is much confusion between He the Narrator and He the Brother. This an be easily corrected.

My best,John L.

2009-02-17
Wow, Stan, with a vocabulary like that, we might have to send you to law school...

2009-02-14
Great similes. Great poem. Applaud and bookmark.

2009-01-31
very pretty, Phyllis. Check spelling "icicles"?

2009-01-29
Wish her a Happy Birthday, Jeanne, from me, and may the Creator guide and protect.

2009-01-21
A very good write, Stan. As for Obama, time will tell.

2009-01-16
Nep, it's the site format causing the line breaks.


Stan, nice job. Keep 'em coming.

2009-01-14
A big acrostic challenge
Powerful tool in the hands of a few
opens your eyes, lets you see things anew
expressed in feelings, heart-felt point of view
timorous squeaks from the turns of a screw
rigorous vision the whole cold night through
yesternight's blackness tomorrow's soft blues

pleasance of mind is what he hopes you'll find
opens his soul in the hope folks aren't blind
eyes of the dreamer transcend sense of time
message deflected by those so inclined

original thoughts that just cannot be taught
rejects upset him when his thoughts aren't bought

pray for the soul of the miserable scribe
open self-loathing and subject to jibes
every day keeping his faint hopes alive
trying to send you some interesting vibes

2009-01-12
"A few misguided missiles" ?!?


Look who's talking Horse shit now!

2009-01-12
If you think there should be no Israeli state
let me tell you this, people: you're sixty years late
Palestinians should be doing back flips
to have now a homeland in the Gaza strip
instead of firing missiles across the new border
then accusing Israel of committing mass murder
Innocents die on both sides of a war
if you don't like that, then make war no more
Voices so moderate you shoved aside
warned you against this rising blood tide
you blame the U.S: "They're puppets, those Jews"
I ask you this: whose puppet are you?
long-bearded clerics who live in the past,
or a bunkered fanatic who murders steadfast?
September 11 should have taught this to you:
if you kill our people, then we'll kill yours, too.
So get off your high horse and put down your guns
then Middle East peace will finally come

2009-01-11
If your wife ever tells you that "nothing" is wrong, you better believe "something" is! Nice write, Stan.

2009-01-10
Ahem. BOOKmarked.

2009-01-10
Lovely. Boomark and applaud.

2009-01-09
You left me out.


W-A-A-A-A-H!

2009-01-09
This is really good and heart-warming. The love of the son, and of the wife, comes shining through. Applaud and bookmark.

2009-01-09
Nice flow to this one, and sentiments well-expressed. Nice write, Phyllis, and thank you!

2008-12-29
Very much enjoyed, Stan. But always eat your eggs fully cooked, lest you make 2 new friends, Sam 'n Ella.

2008-12-23
I like this a lot, but I feel like this is just a beginning. Pray tell us more.

2008-12-19
You got me with the falling desert sand grains. Well done.

2008-12-18
I really like the consistent intensity of this one... I started to stress as I read it.

2008-12-15
Great write, Stan, and I couldn't agree more!

The less frequently I drink these days, the harder the hangovers are...