Jalaj Soni

2017-03-19
"nothing is perfect" only when we're forcing things to be perfect.

Once we let go, a night like the one you described can't be anything less than perfect.

Fantastic, in its truest meaning.

Thoroughly enjoyed.

2017-03-18
That was hilarious! xD

I thought that the moral would be - there is a need for coffins with holes. Urgent. Hehe

Cheers from India ✌️

2017-03-18
Beached but lost there..

There are ghosts in the water, please look for me.

The setting and the end coalesce beautifully.

I just hope that no one actually finds you there.. :p

2017-02-07
The anger, frustration at the monotony of it all comes out very strongly...
A really nice poem..

2017-01-31
That was wonderful

2017-01-31
Thank you, Ashe. I'm glad you liked it.
The aim of this poem was to explicitly identify and make known the folly in the mind frame that we are the only thing that matter..

It's heavily inspired by Carl Sagan's speeches

2017-01-03
What a fantastically strong work!! I could feel the heat with which 2 burning eyes would gaze at 1 desolate face with 0 anger and infinite passion.

Beautiful stuff.

2016-09-19
Or you could just take it from each and every beat of my loving heart.

A beautiful ending.. Sent shivers down my spine.

2016-06-06
Thank you so much, sir..

Glad you liked it.

2016-03-12
It's been a while now since I've been trying to and every time I make some progress, some or the other memory throws me back to square one..

One has to force it on themselves. Otherwise, moving on is really really hard.

2015-09-11
Thank you very much for sharing this poem here. It is truly one of the best poems I've read on poetbay..

Hauntingly Beautiful..

2015-09-11
Pain forges the best of artists. It's a very emotional piece of work.
May she rest in peace..

2015-08-22
The world sure was simpler then. A more comfortable place to live, but now with the introduction of complexities, we are experiencing ease in our daily routines, aren't we?

Some guy in a far off land got an idea to use satellites to accurately locate some place and today our lives our simpler with GPSes installed in our phones and cars..

Very thought provoking read. Thank You.

2015-08-22
This is absolutely brilliant! You have a very adroit imagination. Another one of your superb works. Cheers.

2015-08-19
Thank You

2015-08-07
Thank You Jamsbo for the comment.. I wrote it with a view to show how the sorrow ends and the time for moving on is now..

Birds have flown, birds being the psyche of the guy and the girl..
Laid down heroes, the happy times the two had, now almost insignificant.. Or maybe not, because the sacrifice of heroes is never forgotten, is it?

The End of the chapter.. For the couple. And now, its time to move on.. But will they ever be able to materialize the dire need of theirs to move on?

The poem is trying to show a couple where both of them are glum and are tired of being so and want to move on.. But the sorrow is catching on.

2015-06-27
That is one of the finest ways of expressing love and respect for someone.

Very Nice!!

"..even God who created you, is watching in awe"

Loved it

2015-05-16
Astounding work... It would make an extremely beautiful song..

2015-05-11
Jamsbo and Josephus thank you very much do you these comments..

If you guys are aware about this band Rush, you'd know how insightful and deep their lyrics are... I was reading their lyrics and at office when I got a minute free from hours are work..

It just hit me how messed up lives get due to this god of evil.. That is, Routine.. This is a poem about hate and helplessness all in one..

I hope to write something positive in the future, though..

2015-04-09
Brilliant stuff, Ken..
Very pleasant read

2015-03-21
I am an auditor and I find a situation like this quite familiar. :P

I am pretty sure I will be replaced thought :P

2015-01-25
From where I hail, winter is actually kinda pleasant :P

Jokes apart, a fantastic poem..

2015-01-18
Thank You! That was the basic idea.. Just to show how important and... fascinating the universe, the cosmos is and how I can put everything together..

It is definitely my favorite poem of mine..

2014-12-07
Dear Stan,
Read one of your poems after a while and let me tell you, like all of them, this one too has a certain charm which can make the reader smile immaterial of their mood.. Great stuff!

2014-12-07
Dear Stan,
Read one of your poems after a while and let me tell you, like all of them, this one too has a certain charm which can make the reader smile immaterial of their mood.. Great stuff!

2014-11-30
Departure - Christian Lanciai

2014-11-30
Beautiful stuff...

2012-04-20
Ma'am, this is a *beautiful* poem! haha :)
attractively structured and the theme is VERY MUCH inherent to a usual human life..

Made me smile :)
Thank You

2012-04-18
Nice..
Guess, whining about problems isn't gonna help... :P

2012-03-08
Almost EVERYONE wishes to be where they aren't

2012-01-21
If you throw a ping pong ball in a train at the speed of 2 kmph, the train running at 80kmph, the person on the platform will see the ball to move at 82kmph while the person inside the train will see it move at only 2kmph.

Both are right.

So, the speed of the ping pong ball is relative to the position of the viewer.

Speed of light, on the other hand, is not relative. If you travel at half the speed of light, and a beam of light passes by you, you'd see its speed NOT at half of the speed of light but at the speed of light itself. What changes is the time..

Thus, time travel is possible if we could travel at speeds close to the speed of light...

Sth of the like.. :P

2012-01-12
haha. funny :P

2012-01-04
We need more sensible people and less non.. IMO
nice poem

2012-01-04
BRILLIANT!!!!
Love the rhyming scheme and the feel behind it...

very true to the topic and doesn't go astray..
Awesome! :D

2011-12-29
BEAUTIFUL!!!
WHAT AN EXTREMELY EXPRESSIVE POEM!!

You should be proud.
Its very angrily written but you've done what I generally fail to do.. 'let things out'

title isn't bad, you know :P

But are you sure your life is REALLY THAT screwed up?
I mean, most of the time we do this.
I do this ALL THE TIME :P

Think about it, do you think this poem shows how your life is?
(don't get me wrong, its not SUPPOSED to show that.. Its supposed to show what you think, which is perfectly presented.)

Try analyzing your life from a third person's point of view...
You'll know that it isn't all that messed up after all :)

Keep Writing :D

2011-12-07
haha funny! :P
interesting...
Chablis? (sorry, no drinker :P )

2011-12-01
beautiful. very interesting rhyming scheme, choice of words and the pic is hilarious and apt..
as has been said before, the poem describes the town.
Short and sweet. cheers :)

2011-11-14
How do you compose happy poems?! (don't let this comment misguide you. I'm not a miserable person :P :P )

2011-11-06
It isn't bad :)
As has been said earlier.. the emotions reflect in this poem and come to the reader beautifully!
Good stuff :)

2011-10-25
I try :)

2011-10-20
Black...
My favorite color. NO color matches the intensity of this beast of a color!! (but white)

Red...
Lately, I've started to like Red as well... It seems a really rich color which can be used at various occasions


Blue...
Well, Blue is the MOST liked color in the world. Its a very calm, peaceful color. I'd rather prefer Green but yeah, Blue is actually as good :)

Interesting poem :)

2011-09-24
Beautiful! :')

2011-08-30
Leovinus,
No one is a good poet or a bad poet.
Its an opinion. Its always opinions.
One may think you're good, other may think you're bad.
It depends on you, whose opinion you choose to adopt.
Ask, if its bad, why? and also if its good, why?
I'm a below average poet myself (hell! it take weeks to complete a good poem sometimes)
but a friend encouraged me to join this bay and here I am.

Just try. Bad experiences lead to better understanding leading to Good experiences. If YOU think your poems aren't good enough, post it anyway to see what others think of it.

BEST OF LUCK for future.. and yeah, if you have started writing, NEVER stop!
Good day mate :)
(this message is typed in a very positive way. Don't misunderstand anything from the above)

2011-08-30
sounds interesting :)
and the philosophy behind it makes a lot of sense...
nice work :) :)

2011-08-29
nice poem dude!
beautiful poem!!
I could connect to it...
although I did not understand the rhyming part, the poem really touched me
nice work!

2011-08-27
could have been a little longer but good, nonetheless

2011-08-27
Nice one!
the emotions can be clearly understood

2011-08-24
Thanks mate...
Glad you liked the work :)
and really happy to know that there are people who share my thoughts :D
Good day